R.T problem and solution and to add 1ts or 3rd person
Learning narrate
Audience mum and dad
Hero iron man
Villain loki Galactus
END of the world
One day at Tony Stark house Tony was fighting loki he put in jail but it was a clone and it happened again and again but loki got phone and he was looking for Galactus so he can take over the world and no one can stop him Tony flew it hes house and he started to build his best iron man suit he got some help of more people and a suit the size of 10 king kong it had missiles lasers it can fly it has a targeting system and it has plasma shield and a plasma sword and bast proof armour and the best in the world it is Jarvis and it use the power of the time stone from Doctor Strange and when it was finished loki text tony to saying I got Galactus and I will be there in a week tony Stark call the president of each country to send their military group and everybody else to S.H.I.E.L.D headquarters some of the military got to use some of iron man other suit Calactus got here but everyone still not evacuated so everybody who didn't evacuated will go to the train station and some of them will go to the Airport we'll tony fight Galactus with the military tony got his plasma shield and his plasma sword out Calactus shot his laser tony put up his shield and he block it tony went for attack with his sword Calactus shot the laser it hit the sword off the suit and got blasted away so tony shot his missiles at Calacts it did nothing so tony did lasers and it knock him back then tony used the time stone to when he had his sword then the military started attacking me because Loki was mind controlling them so jarvis got control with the suit tanks and planes and helicopters and the guns will not do anything so now tomy just needs to get Calacts he got his sword out and slice him
Kia ora Archer,
ReplyDeleteYou have so great ideas in your narrative. I like how you included characters from the Marvel universe like Loki and Tony Stark. I also like the problem you included in your writing.
Next time please make sure you double check your editing. You have not used any full stops in your writing so it does not flow or make sense. You also have not names of characters that have a lower case first letter when it should be a capital e.g. Loki. If you would like me to help with your editing you can send me your writing.
Next time you need to use paragraphs with your writing. A beginning, middle and end paragraph.