we are learning about doing a Narrative so for the start of my writing I did there I was... so here my writing and I hope you like it
There I was about to climb Mount Everest for food. I got Chocolate bars.Energy and granola bars
and Mini burritos precooked.And water and the stuff a I got was two climbing pickaxes a tent
and a torch and a backpack and a jacket.It was hot that day so it was a good day
to climb Mount Everest.
it was at the started to get hard when I was a ¼ upI was colder than ice and the air was fine for now.On that day I went to bed cold but when I woke up
I had a pre-cooked Mini burritoand some water then I went up with my climbing pickaxes to go faster.But the air
was going low so I had to take more time to rest it was day 40 when I got to the middle
and I took some time to rest but when I went back to climbing but there was rock slide
coming down…But there was cave that was up so I climb up as fast I could I could feel all the
wind basting in ny face but I just made it and I waited until the rocks stop and it was day 100
when I was at the top and when I got down there was a big Parade for me. THE END
I enjoy doing the writing
how tall to you think is Mount Everest?
Hi Archer, most of your writing tasks is going off to the side of your blog so I cannot read it. Can you edit this is some way? or possibly copy your writing into a slideshow and then upload that instead?
ReplyDeleteKia ora Archer, thank you for changing your writing so I could now read it.
ReplyDeleteI really like the idea you had for your writing and you used some awesome describing words (I was colder than ice). Next time, double check your editing, as I have noticed there are a few errors. I suggest reading your writing out loud, that way you will notice where you should add fullstops.